hello, i need help with my thesis stament. i want to get a good grade but not sure if this is correct , let me know any suggestions. 

Topic;what does the poem dulce et decorum est suggest to you about the forces that inhibit or encourage an individuals actions?

thesis:   As suggested in the poem dulce et decorum est, individuals come to be affected by a traumatic event . In order for them to move on they turn out to be encouraged by the death of fellow soldiers , Owen becomes to have the strength to write about the truth of what war really is like and take action by telling those as stated in the poem that there’s  nothing glorious about the war.

please let me know what is a good idea that i should add or remove.

thanks.

4 years ago

Answered By Rachel C

As suggested in the poem dulce et decorum est, individuals come to be affected by a traumatic event . In order for them to move on they turn out to be encouraged by the death of fellow soldiers , Owen becomes to have the strength to write about the truth of what war really is like and take action by telling those as stated in the poem that there’s  nothing glorious about the war.

This is the start of a thesis statement. What are you arguing for or suggesting? Be specific: traumatic event is too general. Try "war" instead. Do you agree with Owen's message? Argue for or against it.

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